
I tried my best to get out of the way
Of his anger that was taught to be love,
But the blows did not stop coming that day.
The moment struck me–jolted me to say
That he had gone too far. I was being tough,
And it was my best try yet. “Get away
From me,” I yelled. “Your behaviour is depraved.”
Hearing just insolence (not the pain),he shoved.
Then the blows did not stop coming that day.
After the hit there was nothing in my brain:
Laid drained on the ground. The Shame: to rise above
I tried, giving my best. Out of the way
Of happiness, I had stumbled. To my dismay
My chosen knight was a boxer in gloves
Whose blows did not stop coming. On that day
I knew my mistake. The day after, I lay
With him. He was sorry; I believed his bluff.
I try my best to stay out of his way
But the blows may not stop coming today.
This poem is proof that good poetry isn’t always about pretty things.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You know the more I read poetry I find that there is so much sadness inside poems that on surface appear to be nice. I am not skilled enough yet to hide my intent.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Here is a link to “One Art” by Elizabeth Bishop (a villanelle). It’s my favorite poem, and worth studying.
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/176996
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes! I’ve read it. It’s a masterpiece. Thank you for sharing the link.
LikeLike
Have you read “The Waking” by Theodore Roethke? I am currently studying it. It’s so strange and wonderful. http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/172106
LikeLiked by 1 person
Roethke? Oh yes! I live in his hometown, and I recently read “In a Dark Time” in the foyer of his childhood home, which is now a museum. I blogged about it here: https://wordpress.com/post/74324604/167/
His work resonates long after reading it. It is really worth spending the time to study his work. Even his children’s poetry. Indulge!
LikeLiked by 1 person
I remember your post Bryan, at least that you read poetry in a poet’s home. I forgot it was Roethke! I am envious. (The link you posted is not working.) I finally have the time in my life to immerse myself in learning about poetry. I see the world differently now. Incredible!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Try this: https://speculativepoetry.wordpress.com/2014/12/04/an-evening-with-theodore-roethke/
I still haven’t mastered phone. Probably because its smarter than me. Anyway, http://www.roethkehouse.org/ will give you a little insight to him as well.
Poerty, in all its forms, will forever be an incredible experience for me. I only wish I had more time to write my own. Guess that’s what I get for waiting until my 40s to go to college!
LikeLiked by 1 person
That works! I was sure I had read it and I had. Thank you for both the links. I think it’s brilliant you are studying no matter at what age.
I read something recently that may inspire you with your poetry, “Each day life will whisper into your ear some little or large thing that must be done before turning to the poem. Yet next week, when your poem is still unwritten, you will not remember why these things were so important, or even what they were. Write your poem.” – Wesley McNair (Mapping the Heart: Reflections on Place and Poetry)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks for sharing that. It makes sense. I’ve forgotten plenty over the years!
LikeLiked by 1 person
An impressive and powerful poem on an important issue. I wish and pray that people stop violence again fellow humans both physical and mental tortures.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I wish for the same…
LikeLike
Thank you so much for writing about such an important topic. This poem really is close to my heart now. Thank you ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Ameena for such a lovely compliment.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Excellent treatment of awful subject
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Derrick. It wrote itself.
LikeLiked by 1 person
” but the blows may not stop coming today” this speaks the mind of those you can’t let it out, those who see love as unfair but still can’t let go, they need the strength, and I believe this poem was it… Lovely poem
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Ruth. Hugs.
LikeLiked by 1 person
This was painful. I have known women who believe it is all their fault. So sad. So horrifying. So helpless.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I am sorry to gave caused you pain. But I take it as a compliment to the poem.
I am surprised to see how many of us have stories to share about domestic violence. Horrifying. Looks like we all know women who have suffered and probably know men who’ll never tell us about their suffering.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh this tore at my heart! I too have known a friend that suffered this. Glad to say she is away from it now and safe too. So relieved to hear that your friend is safe ,but I can imagine it stirred up emotions for you! You did a great job!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you. I am happy to hear your friend is well.
It affects us heavily even when the association is indirect.
LikeLike
This ties me in knots. I have never suffered abuse, but I see women in my counseling office who have. The cycle is definitely there. “But I love! He won’t do it again! He’s sorry, he really is! If only I could do better, he wouldn’t have to hit me. . . . .”
LikeLiked by 1 person
I heard the same. They can’t break away by themselves. Thank you for doing ally he good work that you do.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Abuse is a vicious cycle of hurt followed by remorse. You write about the experience like a someone who has seen it up close. I watched a family member go through this for years. Thankfully, she got out. This is such a powerful poem!
LikeLiked by 1 person
I switched the keyboard on my phone. It is not as good as Swype, but it has better emojolis. It auto corrects and I need to proof read before sending.
LikeLiked by 1 person
🙂 Ok.
LikeLike
I have seen it and the person is safe and happy now.
I was practicing a form of poetry called the villanelle where you repeat two lines through out the poem in a defined manner. I couldn’t think of another theme that would benefit from this form. I am glad you felt its strength. Rather disturbed after writing this though…
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love trying new poetry forms. I’m glad the person is safe and happy 💙💚💛💜
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wow… makes me want to say ‘Get out!’
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes! Sadly it’s a vicious cycle.
LikeLiked by 1 person